October 16, 2002

I HAD THAT IDEA

[Here's the kind of poem you write when you are sitting at your desk at work, thinking about war, trying to be a good Situationist but ending up somewhere between wistful magical realism and dreaming if dim Guadelahara. Or maybe Frank O'Hara, or Rimbaud in Harar. In any case, this poem is hereby dedicated to my blog, Bloggity Blog, who didn't appear to enjoy my previous Beefheartish offering.]


I had that idea, too.
Write the life but according
to principles not usually associated
with life, such as...

And shut off all
auto-correct features.

There is the sound of straining
from the other room. That was the one
vacated by the terrorists. They were brothers
from a little village in Italy. It is now
occupied by an opera singer
with chronic constipation.

Same thing. Taking the pleasure
out of your work. I had serious reservations
about my own writing before I started
this. This talking.

Sometimes it is just
the hands hanging from twin flagpoles
emanating from my breasts. I could shine them,
wax them, spit on them, but they
don’t write,
just hold out for the rest of the day
until I couldn’t brag of them any
longer – usually by mid-afternoon, say 3 pm.
I’d drink more coffee then, check my emails,
play some on-line Yahoo! games, like backgammon.
My flagpoles not buckling in the wind.

My flags empty of wind.
My hands dangling there like flags.

Posted by Brian Stefans at October 16, 2002 02:55 PM
Comments

I very much approve of the lines

"Sometimes it is just
the hands hanging from twin flagpoles
emanating from my breasts."

I suggest the following edit to your last lines:

"My flags wind-empty.
My hands dangling flags."

Posted by: bloggity blog at October 16, 2002 09:05 PM

Sorry to have been remiss! Didn't realize there was a comment -- I can't figure out the notification deal.

Anyway, thanks for the suggestions. "Wind-empty" seems very Pound / Seafarer to me, which is of course good -- so we skid from Surrealism to Anglo-Saxon rather quickly!

Posted by: Mr. Arras at October 23, 2002 02:06 PM

You'll soon find out that I enjoy skidding as well as sloshing.

Posted by: bloggity blog at October 24, 2002 12:12 PM

There are some good bits do you revise?


marvin gardens
How many things can you count in 1 day?
Try to break your record tomorrow!
It makes sense to want to compare.

Posted by: Marvin Gardens at November 8, 2002 12:52 AM